He thought, He thought

He thought the thought he never thought he’d think. I love that line. I wish I’d written it.

As writer’s we’re not supposed to repeat the same word in the same sentence, same paragraph and hopefully not even the same page. Although, there are time when it can’t be helped, as when we’re trying to make a point, or when there is no other word that can be used,, like proper names. But most of the time, we let it pass because we’re too lazy to write a better sentence.

Here’s a good example: She composed herself so she could compose a letter that would explain all previous events.

Two composes are not necessary. It would be more interesting to show her composing herself instead of telling.

She closed her eyes and took a deep breath. There were too many voices in her head, all shouting to be heard at the same time. One by one, she patiently silenced each thought. Once her mind settled,  she understood, and could composed the letter that explained all previous events.

But if you’re Colfer Foin, writing Artemis Fowl, The Atlantis Complex, and are trying to be funny, He thought the thought he never thought he’d think, is a great line.

If you haven’t read the Artemis Fowl series, what he thought is meaningless, but if you have read them, his thought will make you laugh out loud. I did.

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