Friday Fictioneer: Twins
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“What did you do?”
“I wanted to see where the music comes from.”
“It comes from your fingertips.”
They were twins, fifteen years old, one girl, one boy. One left brained, one right brained, communicating could be challenging. Together, they were one of a kind.
She took the garage sell keyboard apart. He yelled as if she’d amputated his leg.
He understood nothing of electronics. She was incapable of reading music.
She laid the pieces out, examined and cleaned each one, before she put it back together.
The keyboard played as if it were a grand piano. He wrote her a song.
The End
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I love the characters you’ve created here, but was confused by “totally incapable of communicating,” especially since, as the story progresses, they DO communicate. Maybe something more along the lines of “their interest as different as (insert something that isn’t cliched)” would work better. Regardless, I really like these twins and would love to see them again!
Good point. I will think on.
I changed it. Let me know what you think.
Awwwwww. I loved this .
;0) Thanks.
You are welcome and well I hope!
I am well. Thanks for asking.
Hope you are also well.
I like the way they complemented each other and made things work.
janet
Thanks. ;0)
Lovely – one of my favourites this week. Together they make the whole. Well done.
I loved it all, but especially the last two lines. So wonderfully abrupt. I’m just not sure what you mean by ‘garage sell keyboard’? Maybe it’s an Americanism I haven’t heard of.
Here in America, people will clean out their homes or apartments and what is too good to throw out, they display in their driveway and sell to whomever stops by.
One can find really good deals, like buying an electric keyboard for $10 to $15.
Ah! Garage sale! It was me being stupid. Thanks for the enlightenment.
It happens to all of us. Trust me I know.
Very creative and well crafted.
Excellent.
Thank you. Very nice for you to say.
This could be said of more partnerships than twins. Lovely piece.
You may be right.
Thank you.
Dear Phyllis,
What a sweet and endearing tale. I adore it.
Aloha,
Doug
Thanks, Doug, that’s sweet of you to say. ;0)
Phyllis
Dear Phyllis,
I loved the way the twins comprised one person with the left and right brain. Actually reminds me of my brother and me, although we’re not twins. 🙂
shalom,
Rochelle
I bet you have some fun stories to tell.
thanks for reading.
I love the interplay between the scientific sibling and the musical one. Reminds me of my family 🙂
Thanks for reading.
Which are you?
Hi, Phyllis!
In answer to your question, my story is at http://mezzojan.wordpress.com/2013/10/24/broken/
Enjoy!
Jan
Love how you also reversed the sex archetypes.. a technical girl and a musical boy. great story
Thanks. I almost went cliche but stopped myself.
Glad you got it. ;0)
Love the way you use twins to balance the story. Really clever and well done.