Friday Fictioneer: Otherworldly
“Got it. The last thing on the scavenger list; an otherworldly item.”
“We’re finished.”
Copyright -Jennifer Pendergast
“Yeah.”
“Let’s see. Yuck! What’s that?”
“Human heart.”
“Where did you get it?”
“Anatomy class.”
“Anatomy class? What’s that?”
“They open people up and look inside.”
“Why?”
“For the fun of it, I think.”
“While they’re alive?”
“No they kill them first.”
“Decent of them. Let’s go home. This place is creepy.”
“Yeah.”
The boys ran and jumped through the portal.
The arch image simmered for a blink of an eye then returned to the peaceful fall scene.
The End
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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge to write a 100 word story from a picture prompt. It’s hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, anyone can play.
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This was great but would also make a great longer short story – a scavenger hunt from the other side. Cleverly done.
Thank you. Glad you liked.
Dear Phyllis,
I think I’d be running back to my own world, too. That’s a creepy anatomy class. Snappy dialogue.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Hi Rochelle,
Thanks for compliment.
Blessings Phyllis
Dear Phyllis,
I thought you were going to write about Miss Portal’s School for Girls but I was wrong, again. I loved your POV and the way you made the boys sound just like boys. Not easy to do, especially if you’ve never been one.
Aloha,
Doug
You’re right, Doug, never been a boy or raised one.
Have known my fair share of them and I have spent time with men who have yet to fully grow up, which has made for a lot of laughs. ;0)
Blessings,
Phyllis
That made me laugh ( my daughter is currently taking anatomy and just did the heart )
What fun. Did she laugh too?
Such a nice hilarious touch in a sci-fi story. I loved the use of sarcasm.
Thank you so much.
I like the idea of a interplanetary scavenger hunt. Well done!
Phyllis, Good story using the archway as a portal. I also think your story would be a great hook for a longer story. I bet we all want to know that the boys’ world looks like. Well done. 🙂 —Susan
So many story ideas. Not nearly enough time to write them all. Thanks for the comment and like.
Thanks, Jan.
That was not something I saw coming… enjoyed!
Thank you.
Great dialogue! I love their discussion of the anatomy class, not quite understanding but accepting it 🙂
It was the view point of a boy from another world who didn’t understand what the class was about.
Glad you liked it.
Love the take on anatomy class – from an aliens POV. Good stuff!
Thanks.;0)
Great piece of sf. Is it happening all around us?
It very well could. so be careful who you run into. He/she could be a visitor.
I like the POV here and the way you look at our world through their eyes. My only concrit would be that I think you don’t need the final sentence. The return to the fall scene seems a stronger ending to me.
I reread it. I see your point, but I need 100 words. I dropped the last line, but kept the rest.
Thanks for the suggestion and the like. ;0)